Unfaithful Partner – Final Straw


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The opening sentence for the January 29th Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner:  

“The last time, everything fitted in three duffles, not going to work this time as he tried to push his personal belongings into the third bag.

It was never meant to end this way, she had been having an affair, leading to the final breakup of a shaky three-year relationship with what he thought was the love of his life.

He had been trying not to let his mind think about the feelings he had building up in him daily about his partner unfaithfulness.

But he had returned home a little earlier than he had intended too, there they were both in each others arms.

No hiding from anything now it was all out in the open, that dreaded feeling was back in the pit of his stomach that he had been fighting for some days now.

It wasn’t going to work, no way was he ever going to get all his gear in those duffle bags, what about his share of their relationship, he might as well just walk away and forget about everything, after all, he wouldn’t need anything where he was going.

7 thoughts on “Unfaithful Partner – Final Straw

    • Well, this is my first piece of Flash Fiction, you write a story based on the photo prompt and introductory sentence in 200 words or less.
      Actually, when I posted it I had 285 words, it was hard to cut back to 200 words and make the story sound right.
      I could have just about written a full book about this prompt, but there you are, my 200 word flash fiction story.
      I think I will be writing many more, it was very enjoyable writing like this.

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      • I’ve never tried flash fiction. Was this a timed event?

        You did well keeping it under the word count and that must be a difficult writing task.

        Well done friend. I’ll look forward to your future stories.

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      • There’s a link at the top of this story” Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner” if you are interested.
        Thanks for the comment, also my friend.


  1. Ooh, that’s a rather ominous last line – “he wouldn’t need anything where he was going”. I hope he’s not so upset that’s he’s going to do something “stupid”…

    I see in your comment above that this is your first flash fiction – well done 🙂


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